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Dagny
For my voice class we were told to find sheet music for a song that we liked and learn it for the class. Well, I didn't find sheet music, but a good friend and musician is willing to transcribe some for me. I've been practicing the song, Our Farewell by Within Temptation, just off a recording for a while and I think it sounds fairly good. I made a recording of it. Please download and let me know what you think, specifically how I could improve.
As a side note, I just want to mention that I just used the sound recorder feature on my computer which only records 60 seconds at a time, so the little clicks between verses is me hitting record again.

Our Farewell - Me
crazy cow
would be nice to hear it with accomp! i'm not a 'proper' singer, so any ideas won't be 'proper' maybe the line 'name' (? i think) in the first 'click' section could be a bit smoother, and maybe pronounce the words a bit clearer? and now all the singers will come on and tell me i'm giving bad advice!

oh, and don't cough in the middle tongue.gif sounds good to me though smile.gif would be nicer with backing if you could record along with the CD or something smile.gif
Dagny
I would record it with the song going in the background but I don't have just an instrumental track and I have a tendency to try and sound like the person I'm singing along with, which considering how different the singer's voice is from mine sounds ridiculous. I agree though, I wish I had some accompaniment. And that the first section sounded better, agreed. Thanks.
sarah-flute
You have a lovely tone, Dagny. I'd agree with CC the words could be a bit clearer.
jod
Your overall vocal tone is very beautiful, with a very sensitive use of vibrato.

Your tuning is generally accurate. Take care not to let the notes sag as you run out of breath.

Occasionally your voice becomes slightly breathy. Make sure you bring the corners of your mouth in slightly as you sing, and this should sort this out.

Also as you approach your lowest notes, have a feeling of broadening across your lower neck rather than chest.

I agree with the comments thus far on diction.

Dagny this is really promising, my criticisms may seem hard, but these are only minor corrections, not major problems, and if they get sorted this will be very good indeed.
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